r/learntodraw 2d ago

Critique Something just feels off about these

I was drawing on the plane but these two sketches just don't look right. Any tips?

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u/IcyGem Beginner 2d ago

The shadow on the 2nd page is too erratic and I couldn’t make sense what the background is other than the person

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u/_lord_farqua_d 2d ago

The shading is meant to be erratic to show spiraling depression. It's not supposed to look like anything, but I can see how it looks messy to a lot of people

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u/Nijanar 1d ago

Not me thinking it was just two dude's lying in grass... I need to reevaluate my life.

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u/Savage_Nymph 1d ago

I see the same thing!

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u/IcyGem Beginner 2d ago

Mybe the hair shading is not the same as the first page?

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u/Vegetable_Test8329 Beginner 1d ago

Man your style is awesome sauce, I love it and I’m not all that experienced so I have no feedback on anything that seems wrong/off but hey I appreciate your drawings they’re pretty good!

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u/-Notrealfacts- 1d ago

That first one is b*tchin!

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u/Nijanar 1d ago edited 1d ago

1st drawing- shoulders should be wider. (What you drew should only be the size of his torso, and then add shoulders/arms onto that) Looks like an adult neck/head on a childs body.

2nd drawing- you took the saying "i have your back" too literally man. You even missplaced it! Why is he cut in half vertically? 😭 Just because his arm/armpit stops there doesn't mean his torso should. Look at your own body from the side. There is bone and meat and muscle even behind your armpit. Draw the body before you draw the clothes.

That's all.

P.S. I really love your art style. The way you draw faces is really pretty.

My only advice: Practice some full body drawing again before going into more complicated poses. Lest you end up the next Frankenstein. It happens to the best sometimes.

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u/_lord_farqua_d 1d ago

For the first one, I think I had tried to make the shoulder tilt back, but I don't think it was achieved well. Definitely makes the head look too big. For the second one, I never actually intended to draw an arm, and I think I screwed up the proportions when I didn't draw the arm first. I tried to just make a general blank space in the back ground and add some details for clothes. I should be more careful next time and thanks for being harsher with pointing out errors. It helps me see where I went wrong

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u/Nijanar 1d ago

If you want the shoulders tilted back, I suggest drawing less of them. In the sense that the picture is more dominated by the chest. So puff out the chest.

Whereas it looks like he is slouching in the first one and his torso is too small.

A trick I learned from a youtube video (can't exactly remember which one) was to never start drawing from the head! Because you always end up making the head too big that way. And it was true for my style.

If you are doing a full body pose, i suggest drawing from the feet, and if you're doing a half body, start from the neck-> collarbone-> shoulders and torso-> then the head. It helped me with proportions a lot andI realized I had itin me the whole time. I was just complicating my drawing process with very difficult start up points.

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u/Nijanar 1d ago

I don't know if original posters get notifs for comment replys (I usually don't when I post) so I'll link this here in case you didn't get a notif for it. I don't think my words explained it very well so here is what I meant in sketch:

https://www.reddit.com/r/learntodraw/s/XBTFU84vID

https://www.reddit.com/r/learntodraw/s/nEbXNx2ZDS

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u/Nijanar 1d ago

FOR SOME REASON MY SKETCHES KEEP getting deleted. HE'S NOT NAKED! HE'S A SKETCH!!

So I gave him bandages and he's not naked anymore.

This is sort of what I meant:

The body underneath the shirt.^

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u/Nijanar 1d ago

The body with the shirt on.^

P.S. I am not very good at drawing shirts so I did my best to copy your drawing of it. My attempt does not give it justice.

Like you can see, there is the little bit of his back underneath/behind the arm/shoulder. That's what I refered to when I spoke about the character being "cut in half."

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u/_lord_farqua_d 1d ago

Ok, I was fixing it and then it's pretty much identical to your version when I looked at your comment. I should probably pay more attention to the anatomy next time.

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u/Nijanar 1d ago

That gives me some confidence in my words.

Mine may not be the best example out there, but let's improve together then! ( ^▽^)

I think you got some great feedback here, I'd suggest asking on r/ArtistLounge if you haven't already. You might get some good advice.

P.S. Please consider making a tutorial post on how you draw faces! (〃´▽`) I love your facial anatomy and expressions. What refrences do you use?

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u/LoyalPeanutbuter12 1d ago

I'm not an artist. I am very much guessing, so take this with a few buckets of salt...

Might be face proportions. It feels like the nose or something is very slightly not lining up as the right proportions. something something half half, and thirds and fourths...

I am squinting very hard here, And I don't really see a problem. The sketch looks very good. Have you made a focused study on face and torso proportions before?

Anyways as is, it looks very good :)

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u/TheFloatin 2d ago

The torso is off.. probably small even for a thin character or maybe the shoulders aren't broad enough. And the arms are too thin

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u/SadKidWhoLikesWatchs 1d ago

First on reminds me of grappler Baki. BTW I know jack shit about drawing

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u/Viva_Las_Vengeance 1d ago

I'm curious - how did you learn to draw like this? I really love your style

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u/_lord_farqua_d 1d ago

I never took any classes or tutorials, so I went along for about a year or so just drawing until I got consistent. At that point, there were just little things etched into every sketch from various sketch habits i picked up. It's pretty hard to break away from one way after repeatedly doing it. Might as well be the reason why I can't learn new styles

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u/LizSourFruit 1d ago

Could it be that the shadows in the second image are in odd places. The shadows on the first image strongly imply that that light is coming from the top right of the page. Maybe it isn't very clear where the light source is on the second image.

The hair on all these characters are so good btw; the level of detail are different on all three but they all have the same vibe.

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u/_lord_farqua_d 1d ago

Yeah, I've never actually learned how to draw clothes or shadows very well. Gotta practice doing that more

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u/Turbulent-Focus7185 1d ago

they feel nicee

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u/Sxygus 1d ago

The style is really cool. The only thing I can think of is maybe more contrast on the first one

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u/Bootiluvr 1d ago

I really like the first one. I think the second one needs a bit more rendering and contrast

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u/grumpunk 1d ago

I think your style rules and you’re doing great

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u/My-balls-itch-6969 1d ago

I’d say the problem is with the mouths which could be a bit off try doing a sketch of the lower jaw line so you can fix that. Hope that helps!

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u/guuuuuda 1d ago

For the 1st one it's probably the chin placement, the face is pointed up but the chin is down, just redraw the chin further up and that feeling will probably go away. or take a break from drawing and look at it again, sometimes we're too critical on ourselves, hope this helps :)

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u/Miserable-Willow6105 1d ago

Unrelated but first one looks like Near from Death Note. Is it intentional? Because he is my absolute fave lol